J. Haux

I'm not good with poetry, but I wanted to tell you I enjoyed it. And I love oranges. They're sweet and tangy at the same time. Have you ever been ...

Don't thank me yet. :wink: I'm not sure if you expected me to write more, or not, but I will anyway. 1. I'm not sure how it fits into the ...

Despite my being almost-but-not-quite completely lost...I will try to help. How could you improve it? Well, with more description, perhaps. Amala sat in the large, almost royal looking library, watchi

Ooh! Okay, I'm interested. I'll have to look at the beginning first. I despise having to start in the middle of a story. I hope the first twelve chapters are ...

Wow. Just--wow. Oh, Dusky, you are so talented! The turbulance of self-conflict was very well portrayed. :D At first I thought that she was going to be skitzophrenic (

I can't add a lot to what others have said. Hide and Seek: The Child

I think this is my favorite of any of your works that I've seen. And you've come a ways from the first draft of this chapter. (Have you written all ...

Suggestions on a title? You don't need one. At least, not now. The best time to worry about a title is at the end, when you've written everything down and ...

First of all, I'm really picking with most of this because I had to copy and paste it on here because I can't see it at the bottom of the ...

Oh--you did post it twice! He spaced the paragraphs for us so we could read it (I read it anyway...most of it). I've never seen the & sign used in ...

Don't worry about a title until you've finished your story (meaning, the storyline as a whole). Then worry about it. :wink: I noticed that you spend a lot less time ...

I'm glad you rewrote this, because it definately has the potential to be expanded, and should be! There are so many questions raised about the character--we get the feel of ...

I've tried twice to reply to this, and am at a loss of anything intelligent to say. Let me say this: this appealed to me in an unexplainable way. I'm ...

Oooh...I like how it's going. :D Do you know, it reminds me vaguely of something I read...No, no, your ideas are original. It's the style that makes the resemblance... *sigh* ...

I don't have much to add to Silverstar's comments. I feel like you're giving a lot of unnecessary background info, and it detracts from the story. Remember that we don't ...